Haiku Poetry - Comments Please?

The Haiku is a traditional Japanese poetry form that has been translated into English. The common misconception is that Haiku's should have a maximum 17 syllable count split into 3 lines as follows 5-7-5, this is not so a Haiku can contain less then 17 syllables but no more.

The first two lines create an image within the readers mind with the third line creating the 'ku' or aha moment where the reader realises the initial picture is not the whole scene, the 3 lines are all on the same subject but you create a juxtaposition. Traditional Haiku revolve around the seasons and there is always a word that indicates that season, though it may not be obvious. Contemporary Haiku tend to reflect human emotion.

No poetic devices are used in the Haiku, it is merely an observation of a moment in time. Haiku do not usually have titles, but the first line can be used as the title, neither do they contain punctuation or capital letters, the '-' is added only to show where the aha moment starts.

Comments appreciated;

~Haiku #38~

feathers bloom

in spring courtship –

inky quill

~Haiku #37~

a deer trembles

in Autumn’s morning mist –

a cougar waits

~Haiku #35~

in warm eiderdown

by icy pond -

ducklings skate

~Haiku #34~

chaos on the battle field

helmets strewn in autumn dusk -

harvest time again

~Haiku #32~

sprinklers whispering

shimmering ‘cross summer lawns -

house burning brightly

~Haiku #30~

grey-red mosaic

drying below the May sun -

a recent roadkill

~Haiku #28~

perfect sky

ripped by thunder –

pilots playing chase me

~Haiku #26~

Timber shuddering

in early April shower -

a chainsaw cuts deep

~Haiku #25~

suns rays

dancing on the beach;

her hair

~Haiku #22~

two shoes lie mirrored

forgotten when spring cleaning -

the wake remembered

~Haiku #16~

entrance at last breached

by a hard battering ram -

virginities death

~Haiku #15~

shifting the gearing

as more speed is required -

orgasm approaches

~Haiku #10~

virgin cold

shrinks capacity -

yellow snow

~Haiku #9~

sunbathing wet stones

beneath waterfalls cascade:

dog with cocked leg