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Fug-azi asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

Poem To Critique Please?

~Dawn Fix~

There is nothing so fresh

as nicotine scissors,

-inhale, exhale-

to bring temporary death

closer to reality,

and exaltation

of soft spirals

expunging doubt

that both will finally be

ashes.

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  • 1 decade ago

    suggestion. enlarge the metaphor to the whole of life and death like pruftock?

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    It's okay, really short and not very emotional which is what poetry is about...emotions

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    hehehe.

    nice connection...ashes to ashes and dust to dust. :)

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  • 1 decade ago

    i like i like

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