Random Poem i made up.?

your really good at writing, and im a year older and i do that kind of stuff to, and they also tend to be good.

I don't know if you care, but if that's how you feel (which im guessing it is) you got to church, and your a strong believer. I think the church you go to is probably one of the stricter ones. I also think that when you were younger -like a couple years ago- you were still afraid of th dark, and basements, and you probably are still a little bit. And i'm also gusseing you are frm around the really sothern part of the states do to your accent that i know you have from the use of your word ya'll.

I like writting poetry to and i'm 14, but im also good at tell ing how people feel and that kind of stuff, at least so my friends tell me. But it would be awesome if you could add if i was right or not to your thing but if you don't wan to i totaly understand.

anyways, keep writting poems, you git sime good skills.

you have a lot of grammatical mistakes which make the poem look like garbage. other than that though, it was alright. nothing great. sorry, just being honest.

oh sorry, i didn't realize you're 13. that's a good poem considering your age.

I really like it!!!! You must have a lot more that you wrote! You sound like a natural. Maybe next time, try to make it rhyme a bit more. :)

Hope this helps!

I really like it! It's deep, insightful, and dark! Good job!

i chucked on the final line, "they" set the guidelines no longer appropriate to you and me, for in mind's eye we can be something and unfastened,,,in darkest truths or the brightest ones lol,,,