hows my valentines day poetry?

0/10

HAHAHAHAHA! kinda sweet!

Here's an idea for

YOUR TALK MADE THE WINDS BLOW

*Your voice made the winds blow

YES DEF. YES

10/10 now I shall GO :)

I think your poem is magnificent. I wrote one for my girlfriend:

So though you made yourself come from lust

So though you acted like you were riped from the sands of time

So though you inspired ecstasy in the eclipses of sun

And made veiled sin like immortality reminiscent

I pledge my soul to you so very grand

I love you from another live

I love you very so like the angels

And I will be St. Valentine

you're able to be writing lyrics for musicals. it is amazingly Gilbert & Sullivan. even with the incontrovertible fact that, i stumble on the 2d stanza very unsatisfying. The rhythm does not artwork, esp. in the 2d 0.5. that's beneficial to get rid of "and metaphor," or a minimum of exchange it to "metaphor and simile." The "ee" sound is plenty extra open and has extra constructive connotations---"whee!", "glee," "reverie," and so on.---and for that reason the opportunity of extra useful, extra suited rhymes. The "for" of metaphor is plenty too closed and has too many unfavourable connotations: "*****," "chore," "gore," and so on. additionally "loneliness" and "tenderheartedness" are too a techniques faraway from one yet another to be a rhyme that sticks out, partly because of the fact the rhyme is vulnerable as that's, based basically on "ness" to do the job. all the different gadgets of three rhymes have 2 syllables in easy---and that they are extra clever/exciting besides. "Roses" and "divulge," because of the fact they are approximate, returned do not stay as much as the standard of the different 2 stanzas and their rhymes. to boot, the 2d stanza somewhat could have the comparable AAABAAAB scheme the others have (or, extra suitable, CCCDCCCD). i don't, even with the incontrovertible fact that, see quite some an issue with "you" and "to"; in reality, the "to" surprises the reader---and, I could admit, an imagined listener. For me there is in basic terms no escaping the poem's music lyric high quality. the different stanzas are suited, however! And stumble on a composer you could collaborate with on a musical! supply my regards to Broadway!

gud........but it's like u have copied from somewhere......if u want to make an awesome poetry than try ur hand at something funny limirick type which can brought a smile on the girl u want to propose...........

4.5 out of 10!

its sweet...it will atleast bring a smile on a face....it sounds like a nursery sing-song.....lol

YOUR POEM IS NICE

BUT IT NEEDS A BIT MORE SPICE

datzz such a sweet 1..... 10/10....... :) :)

It's Ok Ok