Please read my poem. Any Suggestions?

Kate how very, very true, this something i try to teach in life " do it now tomorrow maybe too late".

I shall print it to send to the people who are in a mourning situation, and through the church i meet many.

Well done very perceptive, and so gentle in it`s message.

Seems to be well thought out and balanced with one exception...

The line "No albatross tied to the mast,"...

I have no clue what that means, nor would many people - if any.

I know an albatross is a big white bird that flies around ships for very long periods of time, but I see no relevance to the poem.

The repetitive phrase poem (love is... love is...) is a really horrible motif and very rarely does anybody make it work. Worse than that it encourages amateurish imitators because people have the delusional belief that a bad/simplistic structure must be EASIER. Nothing could be further from the truth.

The roses are frozens

The violets are frozent

Your poem works

oh wait, no it doezn't.

there is present day existence. Apathy, vagueness and the non secular possibilities of the bikini area are with us yet. in my opinion, it variety of feels that existence is a coastline with, or without, the masochistic aspects of bikini waxing. i'm quite pleased with the finished problem here, alongside with the commentary that some non secular merchandising is ineffective. strikes me as an quite genuine looking assessment of a 2d in time from a genuine looking point of view. i like it and would persist with it with ease. that is top up my line.

I had to blink back

tears reading this

The first stanza is

so very perfectly written.

We do the best we can,

for those we love

somehow,somehow

cruel fate

leaves us with

an aching

of unsaid

emotions.

Your poem is really very good.

I would simply like to see another verse about forgiveness to round it off.

the last line is awkward

feels like a question or topic is missing

ex. were is the truth were is the peace

But we have no say in our death

(this means we have no say in truth and peace like we have no say in death)

it good

9/9

i think it's good.

there's no need to change anything about it.

^^

it's good