Rate my poem please, want to know what you think.?

I think it's a good attempt and no matter what people say don't give up...keep trying. It would be better if you could use some rhyming scheme and different words as well as a verse form.

In the darkness of the night

I gaze up at the heavens above

I sigh amazed at the sight

Of the light which illuminates sky

Like knowledge lighting the path of truth

Beauty illuminates the veil of night

The first part is brilliant. Although half way through it, the wording rhythm and rhyme seem to get out of place and start to feel awkward. Also I see the repetition attempted with night sky, but I think it should change through the poem. Maybe try to tell a story of sorts with this poem.

I really like the idea but I'd switch it up a bit. Instead of using sky and night over again, put some different words in there so it doesn't feel so repetitive. I use a thesaurus sometimes :)

very good

but i kinda got a little lost

i loved the rhyme

but like i said i got a little lost but yet it kept me wanting to read

very good keep up the good work :)

-lola

You used to many of the same words.

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