How does this sound? Too basic?

Hello, I'm trying to actually write more of song lyrics than poetry. I don't have any real experience but here are a few lines. If you could give me some feedback, like if it's stupid and too straight forward and trying to make too much of a reference etc... . And also if you think it would be good to start off a song or poem with or if it should be more in the middle.

"

What's left, but to tell of our past?

We were aimless Romeo and Juliet

Looking for a longing love, we knew wouldn't last.

We weren't such tragic lovers, but yet;

...

"

Obviously it's not much at all and isn't even finished idea, but how does it sound?