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Inhale, Exhale

Is life quite like a high school band,
maturing into a symphony?
Is it as much a gentle melody as it is
The crashing of Cymbals
and the percussive generations of a Tympani?
Do you feel the pulse of it throbbing,
or is it more a soothing flow?
Does it keep you singing along
or always changing the channels?
Is it a constant in your presence
and remain until the dirge is played?
I find it to be the core of me.

Anonymous · Accepted Answer

I sometimes want Coco's fanny myself...hehehe...

I gave the child a hard time for writing poetry about what's on the TV, so you get to hear it, too.

It's not so hot today. Get some fresh air,

Anonymous · Answer

Loved that metaphor, although I do wish you'd managed to slip in a bit of that cacophony that you mentioned, LOL

? · Answer

"Changing the channels"  is jarring to me because you were using music so fluidly then you switched to a TV metaphor   (metaphor?  I get these confused).   I love the use of instruments in  the poem - tympani-  nice word!
On a side note I thought you must have something to do with D.  You both are so lovely - smiles to you!  :)

Anonymous · Answer

well done my dear friend   =)

keep on keeping on & it words will flow like water, just as natural as can be  =)

BlueFeather · Answer

Not a bad analogy. As players change, so will the music; sometimes euphonious, sometimes cacophonous.

5 ft 7 Texas Heaven · Answer

Sweetheart, it's a fine effort, and I hope you don't get discouraged to keep on.

Kels and I are stopped to lunch in Alabama, I'll touch when we get home.

Hugs you.

doulete · Answer

It's okay... I don't particularly care for the subject matter. It  doesn't really speak to me for one reason or another.

John S · Answer

nice

∂ιαиα †Matisyahu† · Answer

I find it good, I like it.

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