May I please share a bit of nonesensical writing with you?

I saw nothing wrong with your last line. I do not believe it needs to be changed. It is meter that counts, not syllables.

First of all I see no nonsense in it. How's that? Hugs.

Second it's vague enough but deep enough for the reader to not only see it their way, but actually feel it as an experience they may have already had. I understand you mean this to rhyme and please forgive me this, but, fleeting moments do not last is pretty much a given.

Fleeting moments, shadows cast

whispered wind reminds us of past?

Anyway your piece, sorry

Yeah...have to agree with the consensus...hardly nonsensical! And definitely have to agree with Country, for the concept, the windchime is the paramount icon you could have used! And shadow owns as much translucence as the remainder of your thought. When it comes to shopping for words, dude, you're a wordsinista! *I'm an editor by trade...am allowed to make up words* heh heh

Short and sweet. You are right...fleeting moments do not last. Best to grab hold of each as they come by in life. Nice poem.I liked the reference to the wind chimes. They are very fleeting but they do give a sweet melodic sound when they are heard.

Reminds me of an oldie I use to hum called, "And maybe you'll be there"

Nice warm pen Mixi, I like it much.

Nonsensical? Not in the least!

This was beautiful....I got it,

the fleeting moments, so quickly gone,

and the shadows they leave in their wake.

I wonder if you've described

deja vu all over again?

Love the idea.

Last line seems forced to get the rhyme.

But I think it needs the rhyme.

k. bye.

I really like this! :) It makes me feel whimsical.

So, you believe in the Soul?

ahhh but those moments...whispers in the wind.

Beautiful.x.