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? asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

C/C on my poem, will you not?

*She shrugs*, this just came out today. I guess it came from my past, well, I suppose that's it. Any advice would be excellent.

Restrained

Held tight on leash

We are by Master.

Guide, tugged and pulled.

Commanded, steered, told.

Talked to, yelled at, admonished

Walk this way, turn that, jump here, around the bend, back flip now and maybe even hop on one foot

NOW!

Master holds the rope.

But through it all

I am not alone.

Comrades at all sides.

Stumbling with, bowing also.

Through the cold are

Their warm bodies.

Familiar essences constantly present.

A shield from the world at forever

At my back

A feeling of recognition among my equals

When quick with wit.

But avoided and penalized when acting

Not as mirrored as they all are.

Of course, all tied together

Never alone…

Tired of such an existence

I find the choice quiet apparent.

As Master will not renounce control

And my pack acts as one, and takes me as

Just another, when I

Am not even a part.

And yet, for these companions I must be.

I find I may

Chew through this harness,

Run away into unknown freedom

Accompanied by loneliness, starvation and

Attack… but a neck not strained

Or, to gulp down my pride

And be as another.

They all nag

Master tugs

Independence beacons

Oh, decisions decisions.

Update:

Ha ha, no, tis not about dogs! Although, when I was finished, I looked back and thought, "Hey, that sounds like a dog walker walking dogs!" I suppose the word pack and chew and leash led me (and you), to this conclusion! Aw well, I am not dishearted. Yes, it is metophoric (I suppose if you are compairing it to dogs), and the meaning was not quiet clear. It was basically what I feel it is like to get caught up with a group that you wish you hadn't, but at the same time you are glad you did. It may be to specific to relate to, though I thought it was ok. Thank you guys for answering!

Update 2:

P.S.- I forgot to mention that, yes, I have much trouble getting to the point and tend to ramble. I am still figuring out how to do so..... it will come eventually.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    Its good ...I don't think it's about a dog ....something a bit more Intense .

    if it was shorter it would have more impact Its good I like it

    Thank you for your post

  • 1 decade ago

    It was pretty good, intriguing, but I'm having trouble understanding the meaning. Is it supposed to be a dog at a training center? With other dogs? Sorry if not, that's what my thought was.

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    1 decade ago

    It was a good poem. I assume it was metaphoric and not about dogs! I would make it shorter, more compact, so it would have more "bite." Pardon the pun.

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