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Things I cannot do

I cannot whistle 
No matter how I try.
I want to be able to 
tweet like a satisfied blue bird.
I want to sing that high pitched
little song.

Oh, I hear, I hear it often.
Such a happy little thing,
like helium that lifts above the air,
that I breath in to make me dizzy
in spinning smiles that I can only remember as swirls.
Yes, I want to.

They come left and right,
those who know.
Nonchalantly flying away,
they whistle eating the drug.
I copy, but can't be follow.

I want to whistle, long to.
I crave that sweet, light tune.
When I try though,
Only owls' howl drags through.

Anonymous · Accepted Answer

Hello, this is good. I totally caught the ref, even though it is usually the flight of the bird and not the song representing a high. I have a lot of bird refs....*whistles, walks away*

? · Answer

S3 L5 - I copy, but cannot follow
S3 I don't understand the drug reference
S4 L4 Only owl's howls drag through

I love the sentiment of your poem.  I am partial to blue birds and the symbolism involved.

autumlovr · Answer

Wow, wonderful write Poetry Writer!!!

Your critiques so far are right on and I won't repeat those.  Just wanted to stop in and give you kudos on this little gem.

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