Do you think I'm starting to sound a little bit like SHAKESPEARE in this poem?

How is't with you, my love?

My mind is ins't a pickle.

I would love you all the more

Ift to me thou would'st tickle.

W.S.

PS my mobile hast run out of thy juice, godsooth!

Hi there.

Your poem is so good. But you know, you still got a long way ahead to become a Shakespeare. But yes, you are a bit like him. congratulations to you because I know I am not even a bit like him. :)

Now here are my suggestions about your piece:

L2: "will" suits this line better than "would" because your sentence is talking about a fact not a wish. Or you can say "can" instead of "would".

I am not sure about "look to". Are you sure it is not "look at"? I just haven't heard of "look to". maybe because i'm not reading Shakespeare's pieces. :)

Keep up the good work you Sub-Shakespeare boy.... :)

Now I happen to love Shakespeare's work. I am sorry to disappoint you,but the poem doesn't sound like his work at all. That doesn't mean the poem isn't good. I did enjoy reading it and see some talent.

Just be yourself. You don't need to imitate anyone.

The poem is fine the way it is.

Caz - Shakespeare's reincarnation. So the style still sticks 'til you learn how to unlearn it. William Cazspeare for now then just plain Caz oh but Caz is just better sounding.

The word 'empathy' threw it off for me insomuch as a Shakespearean comparison I just don't recall his using that word. T'any rate... I loiked this one just foine with Caz written all o'er it !

Lets see

Shall I compare thee to [ nothing more]

Thou art more lovely and [ would content]

Rough winds do shake the darling [my soul than]

And summer's lease hath [ to have you by my side]

yes caz, yes,

I'd say you sound like that great future poet, Caz.

Here is as close as I can find to the style:

I'm nobody! Who are you?

Are you nobody, too?

Then there's a pair of us — don't tell!

They'd advertise — you know!

How dreary to be somebody!

How public like a frog

To tell one's name the livelong day

To an admiring bog!

-Emily Dickenson

More like Patience Strong than Will.

Caz, you are unique. Your style is of Caz. Don't worry about the others. Your new avatar is lovely - you must be so proud! Thanks for BA

Not. One. Bit.

Why are you trying to sound like all these dead poets, which you obviously don't! Just write like yourself, everyone's writing is different.