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Unbreakable (Critique Please!)?
As shades blur
Days stir
Losing my balance
Shorting out
Smoke flares from my mouth
Eyes dim
Shorting out
Sockets burst
Not so shatterproof
As I pick up my shards on the ground
Looking down
Fading to black
Unstable
What constitutes self punishment
Unscrew the sockets
Put in new bulbs
And light up again
3 Answers
- Anonymous1 decade agoFavorite Answer
This was okay. the one line that did stand out to me was 'put in new bulbs and light up again."
I interpreted this as meaning sometimes when your soul begins to dim and whatever hope there was finally dies out, you begin to surround yourself with those who love you and wish you well, and your able to revive that lost hope once again.
Just my individual interpretation. But your off to a good start, you just need to read great poetry to become a better poet. Expand upon your vocabulary. Learn about imagery and how to properly use metaphors. Using effective metaphors can do wonders for a poem. It adds depth to its meaning.
Keep Writing.
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- Shadow PuppetLv 51 decade ago
It made me feel terrible..
BUT, that means you succeeded.
I can tell you put a lot of sad emotion into it, and it transfers well <3
read mine?
- 1 decade ago
Good . . but its a little complicated . . like a metal song
overall good
also check mine http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=ApSVL...
