Comments on this short poem about life?

The poem has a certain grace, truth and talent. It isn't easy to write short, meaningful poetry and you have nailed it.

I must say the mixed metaphor does distract the reader.

Wheel- spring flowers-counted hours do not connect.

Life turns in a repetitive slow circle;

Renewed by spring flowers,

Frozen by winter snow.

Or finally circling to an end-

No matter how we feel,

Despite the number of rotations,

We go from then to now.

Edit

"they are different manifestations"

Exactly my point. Manifestations of what? Life? How can life be a wheel which is turned and also renewed and also trudges?

And it does... Nice thought all put together. On ancient headstones around here, they used to put how many years, months and days a person lived upon the earth, like counting the hours. They don't do that anymore, but it was kinda neat. And kinda sad.

The oldest star does not know time. We are at the beginning even as we await the end.

Living and dying

Everyone's doing it.

So what's the big deal?

Yeah, I like yours better too.

I really love this poem its so deep despite its few words. you are a wonderful poet.

will you read my poem?

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