Would you please comment on my poem?

I'm not a poet and never have been for 20 years ... lol

It's silly don't you think I think you could write a good poem can I have best answer I need the points .

Why is it I never get past 9 % best answers ? ..I must be Sh** at answering questions lol :)

This will absolutely make me unpopular however it is real. I regularly wish the reality, however I wish it to make experience. Some of the men and women I have met right here provide what I expect is good-that means recommendation, however their strategies could wreck the poem in innumerable methods. If I had been much less skilled and no more expert, I could no longer discover this annoying, however I ceased being green years in the past. If anybody does no longer just like the poem's inspiration or language, I could like to listen to why. If anybody thinks the syntax is strained, inform me why. But you'll bigger recognise what it's you are speaking approximately, when you consider that I must be competent to be trained anything from you when you present recommendation. Unfortunately, that hardly ever occurs except I have the well fortune to seize Hypocorism in an off second and he stops to research and reply. If you prefer what I write and desire to praise me, that is ok. If you honestly present a notion that's good-proficient, even bigger. If you present me rubbish that demonstrates not anything however how little care you're taking with phrases and endorse I do the equal, then disgrace on you. Tact could be very predominant, do not get me mistaken. But ultimately, I'd like to peer a few good-proficient evaluation of poems and considerate strategies. I've given greater than my proportion, and now I will wait to peer what number of others can, or will, comply with. How's that for reality?!

Lissen here, young man, when I was your age we didn't have no damn fancy in-tro-nets. We hadda write our own poyms. Didn't have no fancy ink, neither. Charcoal is what we had, and scraps from down 't the lumber mill for writin' on. Splinters, sure, but we didn't mind. A bit a blood hardly showed on the wood, what with the charcoal smearing like it did. But we got the damn meter right the first time, I'll tell you that. Cheat? We cheated on homework by using both sides of the wood scrap, nothing more we could do. You kids don't even know how it was....

Guess who got offended at your answer.

thanks for posting it as a question! LOVE it.

recently, I have seen questions that say, their teacher allow them to use ALL aspects of the internet for their homework, even Yahoo answers.

When asked to write a poem, they can also use one from someone who is NOT a 'known' poet as long as they use that persons name on the poem submitted.

no wonder we have teens that can't think on their own. They are not made to think in school. They are now taught to USE people as much as they can....

*sorry for the political raging there...*

haha, love it. No wonder you got reported, I got a violation for a similar comment.

You appeal that, okay? AND HAPPY BIRTHDAY, DEAR LIZZY, HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO YOU! (someone write that gurl a pome! I be doing me taxes. Might be going to prison if they don't believe I have $17,000,000 in deductions.

If you giving PBA's then I'm going home!!

and I am taking the assigned work, that I have finished..BTW

with me.....

and YOU are not invited to my birthday party!!

phhiiiit!!!

it looks more like a song than a poem to be honest

guess who should.......nevermind i got nothin

funny