Sleep... (Critique/Comment Please)?

gosh poems about sleep always want to make me do just that

i think you have some good lines here but the poem could definitely be improved,

In my straight jacket

I quiver

As stars turn to padding

i definitely like that, it's unique and it's a good way of making us realise something, especially nearing the end

the start is where the readers attention is grabbed and that's when you need to pack a punch to make people stick with it, i think you'd need to have a little more impact with your start as it's a little listless

but overall it was an enjoyable read, there are many writes about sleep (especially at this time) and yours isn't really much different but it's not derivative and that's the important thing

Tell me you and I haven't stayed at the same umm....'hotel' lol

Norman Bates' room is haunted...

I like this very much, gonna star it.

great job. keep it up. now your poem made me want to go to sleep and dream.

oh its amazing poem.you write so well.i like it very much.thanks

Its amazing!