Please Just Let Me Fade?

To describe feelings think in terms of metaphor rather than the obvious statements. There is a flow to your words with speaks of you knowing some semblance of poetic structure and rhythm. This is worth more editing. Here is an example of your start, restated:

Eyes, burn and blur

so familiar now

as is fleeting sleep

who am I, who is he

a shadowed soul there

that night seems to be

winning...

you have, in my opinion, properly pointed out the subject. All issues evolve ending in the appropriate degree of evolution this is death. while love happens between human beings in a relationship, the affection they sense at first isn't the affection they'll sense for their mate over the direction of their bond. Its not lots that it fades or dies out as that is that it follows its organic direction in its evolution. each so often we meet on a similar time as strolling a course at the same time. each so often we meet at a crossroad each persons headed in a diverse direction. The era of a love affair is effected with the aid of whichever of those is the case. while 2 human beings come at the same time, they alter into one. this means that before that they have got been in basic terms a nil.5. If the two halfs are surely diverse. the affection passes. in the event that they are surely a similar, the affection could bypass on until considered one of them dies.

Transporter Room ! The Captain cannot be locked in! Change the setting to ZZ Ten Five OMG LOL!

We're losing him ! We're losing him !

This is very emotional , and may I say very good poetry you know people write about ,home work, travel ,

war and Love offering surprising poetry this is well versed and interesting .

I think your a good poet

Thank you :)

It's not a poem, it's an emo whine.

Try being objective and cut out every "my" and "I".

sounds familliar....