An untitled celebration of stuff.......c/c?

It would have been easier to read if you had inserted a line return space between each fifth stanza. other than that, I couldn't really fault the poetry of it all and I did like the rhyming sense especially the fifth line in each stanza as it seemed to accentuate the other four lines, much like an exclamation or to push the point of each stanza.

"lips and lips used twice in the same "stanza" was not a good move.

"flung " and "done" don't really rhyme but considering the nature of the verse, I doubt that many would notice or really care.

"around my neck, the victor's fragrant wreath" is an extra line that really doesn't belong there.

Rating 9 /10

I've always felt you to be an amazing person. A wonderful writer but now I hear the voice of an incredible human being. I am so happy for you and that just doesn't sound strong enough for such a milestone such an accomplishment. Close your eyes and imagine the fourth of July and the fireworks are just for you!

Congratulations Sweetheart. A battle fought and won, won, one, day, after day in a long string of days.

You Sin, are a lesson for everyone who has fought a demon.

My admiration is deep for you -

I need your hard -won wisdom, apparent in each word upon word you write.

sometimes

it hits

familiar

like a song

or peal

of spoon

or curtains

that stand

to watch,

to jot down

thoughts

perhaps to take pictures

of dust that cover memories…

the pills and needles

only push, so subtly

you won’t hear

as you won’t dwarves

who work deep in nights

of ear-piercing calm,

and then

another

storm

hits you again…

but you stand

your ground

unshaken…

Hi SIn its been awhile

Really enjoyed the poem. Your writing is just getting stronger and stronger. Not to say it was ever bad, but you know what I mean..I hope..I will try and catch up with other pieces soon

I yes

would have liked breaks, but then .. then it would not have grabbed me so tightly

the feeling one gets when reading and reluctantly I say I do not like the final line... It came like a slap almost when I read it.

that is just how I read it.

Oh my, Sin, this definitely knocked me to the floor in a most empathic way.

I'm not sure of recovery but the battle for self goes on every day.

In the pain I felt reading this

My meager offering, might not seem like more than a hug and kiss

it's virtual I know, but I pray you know yer bliss.

See I never know when I come on here, how many tissues I will need every day. Hugs you.

Every moment

An interesting scene you have painted.

Have you ever seen time lapse footage...I pictured that, where everything is in fast forward

except the girl and her drug.

powerful statement of human will, human frailty, human need and a

victory won over the greatest enemy of all, ourselves. On display

here with truly raw naked portrayal.Well done...

sin- you are my heroine.

just sayin' and I truly mean it. Rising above with no shame takes CLASS!

*beams*