havent written a poem in awhile (short poem)?

It's alright. I like the idea of using the emptiness of outer space as a metaphor for death but I don't think you've quite done your idea justice. Keep working on it.

The purple vs the blue, what a dazzling website its all one the sting of this beautful nighttime anticipation is extreme and passions run deep hearts are all humming, without an oz. of sleep pals and foes nestled close by area a million minute to pass, as we glance ahead to the experience And now their off each and every of the colors a blur the reds and the blues and a yellow? how absurd! its a tug of conflict all for the time of the nighttime neither team giving floor everyones up for the combat 5 minutes to pass, no fulfillment from the two area the tention is mounting in the direction of the top of the experience yet now a glimpse of desire an prolonged shot down the way each and every of the followers are on their feet, screaming "No way!" yet he does, and he's on slightly saves it from leaving play he then looks up, and sees a single soul down the way. he go's it low, and prefer a mirage it meets the capability and accuracy of a guy named Gerrard its complicated and its quickly, swirving this form and that, yet whilst Gerrard hit it he never appeared returned halfway to the corner to his followers on the kop the roar of the stadium could make your coronary heart stop liverpool has completed it one neil at homestead and the cheers and the laughs drown out Evertons moan

Very interesting. It seems like it needs a lot of work, so it's good you're rewriting it.

I think it was pretty good for only having worked on it for 10 minutes. It was defiantly different, but cool and unique. I say work on it a little but all together it was pretty good. :)