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Critique for my first attempt at lyrics?
~Just A Lie~
There isn’t anything I’d do for you
There isn’t anything worth the time
It would take to make this better
So much less of a crime
Maybe once, or was it twice
Lies fell easily upon these ears
But no matter what you patter
Now I have only fear
Chorus
Why’d you have to whisper sorry?
Why’d you have to cry?
When I told you it was over
It wasn’t just a lie
And perhaps I was mistaken
Though why I do not know
Your eyes they carry lies
And your tears are just for show
Chorus x 2
Perhaps you should stop talking
It’s a sound I’ve heard before
Now it’s far too late to wait
To pick my heart up from the floor
And baby keep your apologise
You’ll need them later on
To be repeated when you’ve cheated
On the next girl that you con
So why’d you have to whisper sorry
Why’d you have to cry
When i said that it was over
It wasn’t just a lie
no it wasn’t just a lie
When I said it was over
It wasn’t just a lie.
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Anyone want to put this to music? I'd be over the moon if someone could.
2 Answers
- 10 years agoFavorite Answer
for a starter, it's pretty darn good! on basis of that, 8.7/10 :D
consider adding hooks and bridges, etc? makes songs more interesting!
Source(s): lyricist for a local band - 10 years ago
"your eyes they carry lies
and your tears are just for show"
simple but deep - great job! that was my fav part!