Can You Tell This Is Inspired By Introversity's Love Poem?

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I reached across the bed
and you were gone
I smelled the sheets
it hadn't been long
a little scratch and sniff
reminded me when
our romantic fun
was a roll in the hay
I miss your beer breath
when we first wake up
your cigarette ashes
in my coffee cup
I'll always remember how 
we fell from the bed
I sat all day with 
a cold pack on my head
you left without even
leaving your number
It's the bar fly's most
common blunder

Ain't Love Grand?

neonman · Accepted Answer

Great ending, brought the story together.  Nothing wrong with a fling provided no rings were involved! lol

autumlovr · Answer

I think this is raw and gutsy and interesting Shirley; a most interesting read indeed.  
The feelings invoke how even the one nighters are missed from the heart.

Socrates · Answer

an insightful piece
well done

I think this line could use revision
-- i.e. another way to say the same thing:
"It's the bar fly's most
common blunder"
and I believe barfly is one word

btw, if you're referring to
Intrusivosity With Medium Doubt,
the last time he inspired me
i had to get drunk
Â ;-)

5 ft 7 Texas Heaven · Answer

Yowee don't know who yer talkin about sweets but the piece you just shared is wonderful as well as steamy.

THE BANNIBAL ONE · Answer

This shows ,maybe appreciate what you have or who.
Once gone they may never return.NO,it isn't grand.
More like a circus many times.
bye

Anonymous · Answer

You are humorous. Nice poem, you should expand it.

Anonymous · Answer

like it. has all the things i consider important. regretful hangovers is a personal favorite theme.

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Can You Tell This Is Inspired By Introversity's Love Poem?

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