On Death..................c/c?

We can bend under the weight of losses. Hopefully the burden will ease with time. Short, to the point and very meaningful to me.

Life is a never ending circle , with lots of twists and bends ups and downs, but at the end of the day we all go to the same place ... 'and were is that' ? who knows but where ever it is we never come back .

Great poetry thank you :)

The title "On Death" is beautiful in itself, and I love the first stanza, but the last stanza doesn't get me. It's repetitive of the last two lines of the first stanza, and I get the symbolism (circle of life) but I don't know. I think even if the last three/four lines were changed, it could be ten times more powerful, and it's already good!

I admire short poems that manage to combine both a message and impact. To me the second stanza had that impact. I could hear the words quietly uttered.

And life continues to bend me, to my knees. I love it when you post.

From child

to hormones

to father

to "takes too long

to heal"

I have followed

life's arc

and begin

the slide down

Succinctly said, Sin

I think the fact that you bend WITH it

will keep you from the proverbial breaking point.

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and I bend with

joy and

surrender

You express your self to simply, but I guess that's the point. 6/10

Your poem is a rainbow, bent by light.