Help me tweak these lyrics, I would be forever grateful!?

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I need a person who's good at putting words to music or vice versa?

Which instrumental of a song would these lyrics go best with? I need know ASAP?

For my counseling class project, we had to write lyrics about anxiety disorders and have to put it to the instrumental of a well known song.

I have three that might work, but I'm not sure how to tweak the lyrics to work with what I have or edit it.
"She Wolf" Shakira or "Back to black" Amy Winehouse or "Toxic" Britney Spears

(My lyrics here, I need to add more, and uhmm repeat some lines or something, we're supposed to do this as a group but the group I got assigned to do only want to talk about their failed relationships and twitter, so ...)

There must be an even number of words in a line or
Else my world will come crashing down and
The sky will really be falling
Don’t wait and see
I will keep it from happening
This world is chaos and I keep order

Every move I see you make is too much disorder
Wipe shoes twice, before walking inside
Keep your person off me at all times
A bare minimum of four showers a day
To keep the heinous contagious germs at bay
Remember to scrub the apple for sixteen minutes under hot water so to get rid of the pesticide and
To keep the doctor way away
House must be sanitized so no cats, and please no dogs allowed!
A perfectly balanced room depends on feng shui, and symmetry.
I demand you learn karma and integral empathy.
There’s no end in sight for my entropy
I’m a compulsive in distress
Let me in so I can breathe


Any help you can give me would be very much appreciated!

Anonymous · Accepted Answer

You have to just count the syllables and then change your lyrics to match the count. The first stanza of "She Wolf" has four lines with the first three lines having seven syllables and the last line having nine. 

So I revised your stanza to fit that and adding slant rhymes, which I think is being used:

Every line needs even counts
Or my world will not amount
The sky will fall to the ground
Don't wait to see if there's enough sounds

Anonymous · Answer

Frankly speaking, your query isn't very clear.
But let me tell you, that the lyric you've come up with is a gemstone - needs a little metrical cutting here and there to bring out its full lustre.
It's deeply thought and elegantly stylized.
Congratulations on that.
Do you want to set IT to a tune?
That part of your query is unclear.
Please repost it with clearly stating your needs re the following :
1. You want it to set some tune to it or not.
2. You want it to be recited against the backscore of a famous song or not.
3. You want first to organize your poem metrically as a standalone or what.
Congrats again on this soulful beauty.
Hope I could help more.
Good luck.

extramil · Answer

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