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Can someone help me fix my sonnet that I wrote by myself? Just minor editing!?

So I wrote this sonnet... I really need help doing the stress marks so if anyone has suggestions or advice on how I need to fix this! I greatly appreciate it!!!

The sonnet poem is full of moldy bread crust

And how I am force to learn this sonnet form

Learning how to write this poem is a must

But at first I must go through this bad storm

On this night, I sit in bed ready to write,

Writing my quadrains with such dreadful fear.

Hoping for luck but my mind like a kite

The A-B pattern, please, please disappear

But sadly I don't have fourteen lines yet,

Almost there but so far away from my goal

I would go into large amounts of debt,

Just to finish because I want an eggroll

I finally did it, my sonnet is done,

I hardly enjoy this or had any fun

Update:

Um idk how to write this in iambic meter... So yeah... Help please?!

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  • ?
    Lv 5
    9 years ago
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    This sonnet to me is like old moldy bread

    but i'm told that i must learn the form

    so here i sit with a pen in my bed

    this is going to be quite a bad storm

    do the rest of your poem, following that rhythm. its important to read your words out loud to see how they flow.

  • Anonymous
    9 years ago

    Is this in Iambic Pentameter? Its hard to read at some parts. Lots of feminine endings, try reading it aloud a few more times.

  • 9 years ago

    Good luck with that! Sonnets are supposed to be in iambic pentameter. Your stresses seem to be pretty far off throughout. Bah-BUM-Bah-BUM-Bah-BUM-Bah-BUM-Bah-BUM.

    I don't think your teacher is going to like this poem very much...

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