is this story good i really need to know?

You should try and think about playing around with the word order, using a wider range of vocabulary and a bigger range of punctuation. I think you have talent, but you need to work on your style and improve how much you describe. Try fiddling around with it.

Here is just how I would write it (I'll be your editor):

It was a cool Autumn night when Ann went out for a jog around the park. She was listening to her favourite song, over and over again - Big Girls Don't Cry. Gasping for breath, Ann stopped, leant on a tall oak tree and took a deep gulp of her fiji water. A bird swooped down so low, Ann jumped in shock. Collage life was tough and sometimes taking a jog on a Friday night seemed the only thing that could relax Ann even slightly. Homework, studying, all nighters, parties - when was she meant to spend time on herself? Lying her head on the rough tree, Ann thought to herself, "I wish I had more time for this kind of thing." Putting the bottle of water in her small backpack, she cracked her neck and took off once more. A while later, after three more laps of the park, Ann sat down on a brightly painted green bench by the fountain.

Speaking as an editor, I want you to never ask anyone ever again to "please ignore the spelling."

You have to get in the habit now of correct spelling and grammar. Make it as normal to you as breathing.

Because when the time comes that you want to sell your stories, I will use sloppy writing as a good reason to send you a rejection.

At this point you do not have a story. It's a description of action, but nothing is really happening.

That's not a bad thing, this is practice. Writing is like learning to play the piano and you're into doing simple exercises to get used to playing the right keys. When the time comes you'll be composing your own. The way to get there is to write every day.

At this point don't ask strangers on Yahoo for feedback. It's just too soon. If you want egoboos, then form a writing group. I was in one in middle school and we read our stories to each other at lunch and had great fun.

I was the only one who went on to be a pro writer, though.

Better believed I paid attention in English and I carried a dictionary around with me 24/7 so I could get my words spelled right.

Read 200 books for each one you plan to write. You'll learn more words that way and recognize when they're not spelled correctly.

Turn on the spell check tool and get in the habit of fixing spelling. Sloppy work means you don't respect your readers. They won't come back.

Get Strunk & White's ELEMENTS OF STYLE. It's a skinny little book that will teach you all you need on grammar and sentence construction. Your future teachers will think you're a genius if you read that book and consult it often. It's cheap at a used store. They have them in the shelves where they sell dictionaries.

Get one of those, too. They tell you the meaning of a word as well as the spelling. The last thing you want is to use the wrong word just because you don't know the meaning.

Read, write, read-read-read, write some more and readreadreadreadread.

This is not really a story, it's just a small moment in time.

When she "speaks" make a paragraph break.

Also, you have inconsistencies in the way you're describing things, the particular type of water is descriptive. Give it more show, less tell. There are 12 sentences here, and 8 of them start with "she" or "Ann", try to find a way to change your sentences up more.

Its good:) just for character development: describe more things:) it was great though! Make a huge list of physical traits that Ann has. Make a huge list of quirks Ann has, and how she will change by the end of the story. What happens next? :) it's great, and makes me want to read on:)

It's dull, monotonous and lifeless. There's no personality, and the description is drab. And no, I won't ignore the spelling. If you're serious about becoming a decent writer, you NEED to improve your spelling and grammar, even in drafts. There's no excuse.