Kindly please comment and advise.?

Perhaps instead of rhyming you may want to make some breaks into stanzas:

Into Every Life

Into each life some rain will fall

And without rain upon us

Will we ever grow?

Like so many others

I am afraid of change,

For I am worried about the pain;

I allowed fear to take command

I set up a post

in weather control...

Storm clouds may rise

And thunder may strike

I've no place to hide.

You say that you are the Lord

And you'll never leave me behind

So you will be here for me

When the rain comes down.

Does that help? It is a genuine, sincere plea for help from the Lord, as I read it. Beautiful poem. I was stuck on only writing rhyming poetry for so long, so I am new to this, but I have great teachers here at Yahoo, Nancy and Dave, Fredric, many others. I've grown fond of non-rhyming verse, and I must say the names I mentioned are great with rhyming as well.

Diddley-diddley-doo.

Me and the Good Lord too.

I feel the pain

that's cleansed by rain

but what's a good boy to do?

Is this what you want? Of course not. There are numerous forms of poetry and prose, because there are numerous ways thoughts need to be expressed.

The most powerful line in this poem is "I set up a post in weather control." It's concrete, original, and works literally and metaphorically. You are afraid of the rain, the floods, the torrents, tornadoes, lightning and all the wild environmental variables that affect us even if we cower in a closet or stand outside to be pelted by sleet and hail. You are trying to control not only nature, but destiny itself.

You put your faith in the Lord. You quit frantically monitoring meteorological reports and live your life, knowing that you can no more control the weather than you should fear it.

You are saying a lot in this poem. Rhyming would be another way of setting up a weather station.

I think we're on the same wavelength, tonight

I posted a poem with weather and it ends with a

spiritual undertone

It addresses solace and pain

that chance toys with in our lives.

Perhaps if you revised, thinking of where

your beat falls (like music lyrics)

You could also divide your poem, creating

tension points.

Into each life some rain would fall ..........(Life must know the rain will fall)

And without the rain upon us ................(Sun appears with warming breath)

Would we (never) grow..........................(whispered words of growth to all

Like so many of us ..............................(As we mortals prone to bane)

I am afraid of change ...........................(Wary with the thought of change)

For actually I am worried of the pain .....(all who breathe have fear of pain)

I allowed the fear to take command .....(worry robs and seizes power)

......................................................... ...............(Plans are readied to unfold)

And set up a post in weather control ...(Weather looms atop its tower)

Storm clouds may rise...................... (Stormy clouds, a fearful face)

And thunders may strike ...................(Thunder will forever sound)

As I `ve no place to hide ....................(Lightning finds our hiding place)

You said you are the Lord .................(You, proclaimed as being Lord)

And never to leave me behind ............(Never wise to query why)

So you are here for me .....................(Comfort, knowing you are here),

When the rain come down......... .......(Should the violence stir the sky).

Into each life some rain would fall

~~~ You ask help as if it is your own work.

Your first sentence, the original version being, "Into each life, some rain must fall!" by Henry Wadsworth Longfellow, tells me that your's is a plagiarism.

I didn't read anything beyond that.

OHHH,philosophy.Very nice,now a lesson.

Never trust anyone except God,

To do so is foolish,and odd.

I went thru Hell today,evilness,

Then one wonders why I sit here.******.

My ONLY friend left is He,

And by fate,He saved me.

No one can bring me down,

With God happiness is found.

thanks buddy..

make fall rhyme with all