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Nekaya Legacy:

New Moon

By: Samantha G. G. Gnagey

Edited By: Jazmine E. G. Gnagey ( the first two paragraphs have been edited)

Madan face , animal ears, fangs or tusk, tail, long nails/hair, (females grow abnormal long nails and have fast growing hair) and a Madanly appealing figure. This race, the Nekaya, known to Madan as legends or so they believe. Nekayas look after Madan as their guardians. Protect them, and when the time arises guide the Madan's souls to their final destination.

Alas on October 31st, 2000 a special girl gifted with the sight was born. Some who believe the legend say this gift was from the grief of the child's loss of her parents. Her mother taken by childbirth.While her father disapperd leaving the birth certificate on the floor with the name Sharmila on it with out a of middle or last name to accompany her throughout life and to this day this is their daughters name. This name is the meaning of the sight.

CHAPTER ONE

"Open your eyes child." Opening her eyes to see a butifull brown eyes lookin down at hers. Orange locks of hair srounded Sharmilas face and her small chubby hand reached out and grabed one. She laughed a kind loving laugh. "So you can see me."

Ever since Sharmila could remember shes lived in the woods with the her protecter Sasha. Sasha taught her how to talk, read, spell, write, do math, history, and what Madans (Madan another word for human) call science.