turn around, new poem plz read:D?

Although im unconfident this will sound any good as i dont like rhyming,

Please comment, criticize and help me as i try to improve my poems:3

Look behind you, I'm not there,

Turn your body with your head, Then I appear,

Your look of fear is enlightening, As I put some gold into your hands,

Then vanish as if into thin air,

Look around, I dart between the shadows,

Gaze into my eyes for a split second, then you find yourself looking at bottlecaps,

Hold out your hand for me to take, I spin thee around while mysterious music begins to play,

Twirling dancing, I hold you, You refuse to lift up ye veil to let me see your glare,

As I depart I leave gold within your purse,

Turn around, please look my way,

I'm not dressed up, its a different day,

I constantly move to stay in your path,

Yet your looking at something beyond as I begin to approach,

Its the mayors son, a playboy I know,

Yet you get charmed by his money and wits,

I start to shake with anger and grief,

Yell an anguished cry, bury a knife between teeth that hide his heart,

Cops appear as I quickly run, hiding to change into my dark one,

I appear from the shadows that hide in the light, strike like a god of the dusk,

Yet it is not night, the place I walk seems as if its within eternal twilight,

20 men of honour fall, servers of justice, guns that rang out in my internal darkness,

Darkness my friend, help me win a bride,

So dark kills many, through accidents, dirty deeds performed for me,

To help me get the girl of my dreams,

The cities in panic, many are dead,

Cursed is their homes they think, as lights go out, floorboards pulled out,

They begin to leave, but the bridges supports snap like matches,

down go hundreds of man child and women, along with my love of the dark,

Weep I do, see you within a dark alleyway,

Start to approach, when I notice the slit wrists,

Puddle of blood making that black dress, so much darker,

Veil hiding face, I lift it over, only to see myself within the orbs that were eyes,

Accusing, smiting, vengeance is done,

Turn around, there is the dark,

Giggling, saying "there she is"

I howl with rage, pick up the knife, charge at the shadows upon its face,

'Turn around" I whisper into its ear, "leave this place before i stab with this knife now you hear?"

Turning around I begin to run,

Jump into the gap to hell that I created,

Hundreds of souls, try to stop me,

My will is too strong, I peel away,

The layers of flesh that hide her within,

Let her loose to go back to the world,

I will serve eternity down here,

thats ok, For now i know, That I have reached,

My turning point.

I dont know if you'll like it sorry if you dont, for those that do thank you:D

Comment and tip me on parts that sound wrong plz?