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Are these short poems poetic?

Okay, here are five very short poems. I hope you enjoy them. Tell me what you think of them please.

The love to stand the test of time

Is the love that will never be mine,

The hearts to brave the fiercest rain,

Are the hearts that solely will never be tamed,

And the desire to forge the longest path,

Is the desire to see no tears or laughs.

I know that we will never be one,

For I am not of your desire,

And the thoughts of me from you are none,

For I'm not the wood to your fire.

Dearest, dearest, dearest boy,

To love you is to be unwise.

Dearest, dearest, dearest boy,

Life me from my ceaseless sighs.

The thought of repelled amour sends me to the floor but I know there will be more and heart-filled gore.

To write a happy poem is to be a happy self,

And to pen a joyful poem is to be in good health.

Yet to write a love-laced work is to be full of hearts,

And when love's rejected is when the melancholy starts.

Can you give me some constructive criticism and then tell me what you think please? Thanks in advance. x3

1 Answer

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  • Anonymous
    9 years ago
    Favorite Answer

    If this came from your heart, then don't change a thing.

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