Is this a good start for a story I am writing?

This is the beginning of my story, related on from the Girl, missing series.

5 years after the events of Missing, me Madison gets herself, and an unlikely person, in even more danger. Not even she can imagine the magnitude this time. Her, and her alone must be the hero once again in a new thriller. (Blurb).

"Bye, Wolf i'm going to Laurens'". I bellowed up the stairs. Wolf was prepearing the spare room ready for when we had to take care of Ellie, Lauren and Jam's 5 year old girl (he would not let me see it- he wanted it to be a surprise). Me and wolf loved looking after Ellie, it made us feel like we had our own child. Our own life we brought into the world and now, because Lauren and Jam are going

away on their trip to Mexico, Ellie was staying with us.We even saw Ellies birth, in that shed. Wow. Was that really only 5 years ago? It seemed like a lifetime ago.

"Ok Mo. Tell Lauren we are prepared for Ellie now," Wolf murmured from the top of the stairs. He no longer had a stutter-around me anyway. Me and Wolf have been engaged for a year now, but we don't have the money for a big, white wedding. Life certainly has not been kind to us. Wolf and I met only 5 years ago, but, after he started calling me Mo I knew it would work. I only let Jam, Lauren,

Wolf and now Ellie call me Mo. They are the only special people now. I've cut all ties with Annie- she was just too much. And, of course, Allan, my real dad, has not spoke to me again after his betrayal. So, in reality, I have no parents. Just a sister and her husband with their daughter and the best fiance you would want. Perfect. Paradise. Bliss. To me anyway. Grabbing my car keys I dashed

to the Hatchback Lauren and Jam had brought us, now fitted with a car seat for Ellie.Driving along I had the unnerving feeling someone was watching me. I could not shake it off, or concerntrate on the road. As the banging in my head got louder, I pulled over to the side of the rode. The uneasy feeling and headache passed and I felt slightly better. Hesitantly, I placed the key in the ignition

once again. Jeez, that feeling was back again. *Fight through it Madison. You're being stupid* I sped all the way to Laurens and as soon as I was their the feeling slightly lightened. *See, you were being stupid*. Before I even had the chance to ring the doorbell, Ellie had ran into my arms, with a new picture to show me. Ellie always had some thing to show me, wether it was a picture she

had drawn, pictures from a day out or something new she had got. Lauren said that Ellie reminded her of when she had just found us and I always showed her something from my past, what should of been her past as well. We always had a special connection, me and Lauren. Todays drawing was her sitting on top of a lion. " Wow Ellie! Have you ever seen real lions?" I asked her. Her face

beemed because of the compliment. "No," she giggled. Her giggle was like an angels. "Well, when me and Wolf have you we could go to the zoo and see the lions, tigers and bears!" I exclaimed. Immediately, she screamed "Oh my!" Quoting The Wizard of Oz- our favourite film we watched together. We both burst into giggle fits, Ellie had that effect on people.She grabbed my hand and led me

through to the kitchen were Lauren stood- hands on hips, talking to someone on the phone. Lauren and Ellie are almost identical, you can tell they are mother and daughter. Same long, brown hair and today they were both wearing pink tops with shorts or jeans. People have always commented