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Do you like my poem? Critique is what I need.?
I wrote this after reading Robert Frost's poem The Road Not Taken. This is my first real poem and it's in his form.
Dearest ****** I hate the clench of your fist
Your smile though left undone like a pause
Your texting and calls I have truly missed
My heart it turns it burns and twist
For your friendship is my cause
Suddenly I find myself in all of trouble
And your voice nowhere to be heard
I run to you on the double
Stumble and fight through the rubble
And yet amidst the fight I hear no word
Time heals all wounds that is what they say
And as friends grow, wounds they all bear
To bring us from darkness into the brightness of the day
Step into the spotlight we are all actors in this play
Say the lines, do your part, and don’t be scared
Tell me the truth are you my friend?
Will you never let anger go?
Will you comfort me until the end?
Can a heart break because it can’t bend?
When I hear your voice I will know
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- ~~*Milieu*~~Lv 78 years agoFavorite Answer
You may have noticed that Frost spoke in specifics he wove images into the poem using yurt many tools a poet has available to them. Good for you for attempting a poem. Now see if you can show the reader.
Source(s): . - Anonymous8 years ago
the question you see, is not what i think... its what it is. yes, is okay. not bad. inspiration is good, but you copied Robert frost's form. to be a poet- you need to feel the form, make your own. feel the words around you, breathe them. feel them inside and out. the paper should be soaking in tears, joy or horror doesn't matter. when you say "this is my first real poem and it's in his form" ... Guess what?! no poems are fake! and the fact that its in another persons form, makes it FAKE! i just said poems can't be fake, there for, believe it or not; it's NOT a true poem. sure it could be a song! a great one actually! for real!
i don't tell you the nice things you want 2 hear, i tell you the TRUTH-the thing everyone else avoids...
Source(s): i AM a poet, PROOF????? can't u tell?!
