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Some of this has been conjured in dream states.

I swear now, I felt her last breath exhaled
as I inhaled my first,
her body quivered at the point of delivery
as I was wiped, whisked away shivering, crying
soon enough I learned realities.

She would never smile at me, see my first steps
encourage my first words, feed me 
what might best nourish 
Should I blame her? I once did,
cursing her and the empty nights, in her absence.

But those things I felt then, I now know
were exercises in futility.
My father, bless him, tried to hold together
the structure of our lives, unable, and so
gave me to my new family, stable, growing,

knowing there is no call to retrace the past
denying. Her life was given, so that I
might have mine, how does one refine
such thoughts, even now surrounded by love
there are still the haunting, dark thoughts.

Oakwolf · Accepted Answer

You had me, from first line to last. Good line breaks, eg "But those things I felt then, I know now/were..." Good one!

cassie58 · Answer

A moving write Kels. A tragedy for any mother to die in childbirth, but I am sure that the thoughts discussed in this poem would be applicable to others in the same tragic circumstances. How could you not have haunting thoughts about the loss of your mother in childbirth, particularly when the child she birthed was you.

`nancyLiz ©` · Answer

I have no idea who you really are however this gives me a glimpse into the reality of what a baby is coming from the womb of a mother who dies in childbirth, My mother and I both almost died, I was not destined to live yet I did, I proved the Dr wrong.

Our beginnings dictate our life that comes after in a gigantic way even if we are not fully aware of it. 

a very good poem, Kels

? · Answer

Like a sick and perverted fairy tale.

Scooter_The_Squirrel_Agent · Answer

Your Mom still lives in you. Watching over you as we speak. Will live in your heart always.

Anonymous · Answer

It's deep very nice!!

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