Help me come up with a thesis statement?

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This is my first paragraph

I am a 14 year old boy, whose name is Flare. I am active outside during the day. ; I spend some time practicing tennis with my friends during the summer and spring. I don’t care what I wear - clean or not - but not too noticeable. . I am friendly to people even if it doesn't go my way , because I wouldn't like to cause a fight, but if the argument is unbearable then I would have to disagree.

Can someone help me make a thesis statement and see if there's any correction I should make?

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Well... this isn't really an essay, so I'm not sure you could make a thesis statement for it. You need a point to argue or convince the reader of. Or at least a main topic to go with. If that topic is yourself then perhaps your thesis could be - I am a carefree young man, who stands up for himself and enjoys being active. See, it doesn't really sound like an essay. But you're not really giving us much to go on. Maybe you're not really writing an essay at all.

P M · Answer

Although this is a bit of an oversimplification, a thesis statement essentially summarizes the point of your essay.  In a descriptive paragraph, it might be something like:

"I am the handsomest boy in my class."  And you would subsequently describe in detail what specifically makes you good looking.

"If you passed me in a crowd, you would likely never remember me." And then you can describe how you are average height, weight, etc.

"People look and me and want to be my friend."  Then you could go on to describe your warm smile, welcoming body language and unassuming clothing.

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