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A little help with sentence fluency?
Hi internet!
I'm writing a little paragraph for an assignment that my English teacher assigned me and we are being assessed on sentence fluency. My teacher really likes to have us use colons, semi-colons, dashes, and other advanced punctuation marks like that. I wrote a sentence and used a colon in it, but it sounds very awkwardly worded. Could someone help me word it better so that I can still use the colon and still essentially say the same thing.
Here's the sentence:
A peaceful scene was forming in the beginning and I didn’t want to create any pauses by using other such punctuation marks than a comma: dashes, semi-colons, or colons.
Any help is greatly appreciated!
2 Answers
- David WLv 67 years agoFavorite Answer
My try:
I wanted to drive my point home with emphasis and a dramatic pause, so I weighed my options besides the comma: a dash, a colon, an ellipsis. I rejected the semicolon because I once heard someone say a semicolon is only used to show you aced college English -- and I hadn't.
Though the "peaceful scene" sentence is kind of silly in meaning ,at least it does demonstrate one of the valid uses of the colon, which is introducing a list.
Hope this helped. Good luck.
Source(s): pro writer - Anonymous7 years ago
try "In the beginning,there formed a scene of utter indescribable peace(and serenity)
