"Sonnet 198" Are your memories seeping into your dreams? Care to C/C?

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Sonnet 198

Moonlights without love, just a waste of moons,
Loose, empty hugs, apt tunnels for the wind,
Sand castles built upon the shifting dunes,
Such sorry wastes, I'm hapless to rescind;
A showy dress of living contents, nil,
A lovely face, to mask the lack of soul, 
Might Galatea all my dreams fulfill,
If statues bear the charms that I extol;
But surely soon, a love, some goddess brings,
Much better though if decked with ancient gems,
Such precepts on which olden wisdom clings,
The best for any lass to wear than diadems;
......My fault, I yearn the past so much, it seems,
......To oft confuse the memories with dreams.





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Thomas · Accepted Answer

Questor

The poem itself, the concept, I like very much, 
plausible and thought-provoking.  Structurally
good job except two spots.  Line one is a stretch
using 'love' and the unstressed word (syllable) is
normally and naturally stressed, just doesn't sound
right, and Line 10 has 12 syllables....any is 2 and
diadem (sounds like DIE-a-DEM) is 3 syllables.
Pehaps I am wrong on both, is just what I saw sir
Questor, the extreme master of the sonnets here
on YAP and abroad.

Congrat

? · Answer

0, this is beautifully whimsical, mighty mature Sonnet.
So good - I`m going now, perchance,to sleep upon it,
and should I dream, as oft, of things now past and gone,
Your Sonnet reassures me that ~ I am not quite alone.

A Total knock-me-down-with-sighs Old Sonnet..so Lovely!

? · Answer

Mostly, my dreams seep into my memories and find their way into my scribbles!
This is lovely Questor...just what I needed to start my day! Thank you!

Scooter_The_Squirrel_Agent · Answer

I liked this. Was pretty good.

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"Sonnet 198" Are your memories seeping into your dreams? Care to C/C?

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