Do you think this is a good poem ?

First of all, I get the asterisks, but there are so many ways to express the same poetically, withought hiding obvious expletives.

Watch EWD, Extra word disorder, filler words not needed, there are a few in this.

Watch tense and grammar. That can be tweaked in this.

"while on the inside I know I need some help" Drop "some"

"I'm twisting I wish I could go back to being twelve" Try

I'm twisting, wishing, I could return to age twelve.

I'll stop there, but with some thought, this can be as intense, without sounding rushed, or immature. If it's teen angst or anger, the same can be said, even alluding to your issues, which by the way, are not at all explained.

It is different and good..

You do not need to use the same word more then once

or any variation of it.Formatting it would help immensely.

Capitalization is also needed.

Things will get better

I keep repeating to myself

while on the inside I know I need some help

I'm twisting I wish I could go back to being twelve

All my happiness is in storage on a dirty shelf.

Why is it so hard existing in this stupid place

my scarred heart keeps on coexisting I feel so misplaced

why does everything have to be defined with stupid race

I swear half the people on this planet are a total waste

and don't you dare say it's just bad taste.

Keep tightening up your rhymes, bro. it's pretty good, just needs a few tweaks to make it sound more clean a little more rhythm.

I think is good

A great rap lyric.