What do you think of this poem?

It shows a needy personality, sketching the history (without great detail) of an attachment shaken off by the other, for a cause the speaker does not know/understand.

The poem has technical problems, that aren't especially important, since this reader, at least, sees something in the poem besides the minor literary fiddle-bits. I dare to foresee similar episodes leading to similar poems, if the poet is writing 'from actual experience,' as they say.

It's satisfying to see into or through a poem, and your present work gives me that chance---even if I"m wrong about it---but there's an ethical problem attached. What should you say when you read a convincing suicide poem, for instance? "Write another one, then kill yourself; this one has a few flaws"? No.

So, whether I'm right or wrong, I'm gonna suggest that you delay becoming attached to the people who give merely charitable support when you're down.

And that concludes my foray into armchair psychology.

I got as far as the second line and see an error.

intentional of unplanned;

This here is not needed,Helped me up,

asked me, "sup".

This is a forced rhyme.

Why did it have to stop?

Ignorance should drop.

The poem shows confusion and a broken heart over lost

forever love.

Most poems been written with an emotion or vision in the words and I can see you were down but you only have your thoughts down in a poem form but not the poem you wanted to sing........writer rework and rework till the sentence, paragraph or even a page till the vision he wants to bring forth.is clear......You have your thoughts down now write the poem....Write with a beat that reflects the mood you were in when you were mad....

It's really nice sweat heart.

I'm lost, apart from i feel you are in dark water

its internal pain from a writers type. I love it suffer on

Pretty good