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John asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 3 years ago

Could someone please critique this poem?

“On a Card for a Double Nuptuals”

Pariahs and Ishmaels arise,

Let's wipe the blindness from our eyes.

Love's a chance, but time's a felon -

Put ice cream on that watermelon!

Find, and live together one

To savor with the joys of fun -

To relish, even, perhaps more -

'til one who're two are three – no, four!

Delighting in variety

Delight must veil in secrecy,

Let secret door's forfould menage -

Two couples' duplex – seem mirage.

For jealousy's there dead

As feeds within his head

An earwig of illicit lusting -

Desire has grown friendship-trusting.

Wives, their husbands, who so bop

As dance this four-way spousal swap,

Take, wedded to a higher power,

Pariahs, Ishmaels, your hour.

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  • 3 years ago
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    It seems to be about an orgy..

    Pretty good but not for children.

  • 3 years ago

    no

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