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2 AnswersReligion & Spirituality1 year agoCould someone please critique my poem?
Apprentice
You need a mad life to prepare
the militantly hip.
To deal with chaos tools are rare,
it takes some time to get a grip.
The city is the last frontier
between the heart and humankind,
but you have there all needments near
if out of mind you'd yourself find.
A working student athlete poor
and major in some arcane art -
that life would be the choice of fewer
than I can think - and a good start
if madness fun were to explore -
so you would maybe long years on
return where you had been before
to pique love's faithful since the dawn,
to be a colorful old salt
where love's a smaller younger field -
then love's ubiquity t'exalt
though peers to disillusion yield....
2 AnswersPoetry3 years agoCould somebody please critique my poem?
"Veterans of Domestic Rebellion"
Men such as have done months of time,
who don't take readily to rhyme -
not oft' affecting arduous sports,
they're hunting for a box of shorts,
a Pyrex pipe, a twenty-bump.
They cycle not - that rush would stump -
but only bike if motorized.
When hung'ring for some eldritch drug
they're known poor scribes for funds to bug.
Their rep's their style and only wealth.
It is unlikely it's for health
when they're seen to get exercised.
Their words, though mainly foul, are prized....
2 AnswersPoetry3 years agoCould somebody please critique my poem?
“Starlight”
I do not know what may occur
in the galaxiy's other neighborhoods,
but one thing I can say for sure -
on our space I have got the goods.
A star – for instance Sol – can beam
but the tiniest share of its total rays
to his own planets' life. 'Twould seem
the rest of his light streams on its ways
through countless other-worldy skies -
then falls, one of many a nighttime twinkle -
into countless alien systems' eyes
to make them romantically crinkle.
…
3 AnswersPoetry3 years agoCan we solve the three-body problem with computers?
3 AnswersMathematics3 years agoCould somebody please critique this poem?
My first-grade teacher said, "To do your best
in all your classes it would you behoove,
so when from time to time we give a test
you'll always know how quickly you improve;
the subjects you most love you'll dazzle at -
if reading, math or science you have shown
to be your greatest gift - you'll then know that
to be the kind of work you'll do when grown.
For spelling words take out a clean new sheet,"
she told us with her canny eyes a-gleam.
"If all get A's by Friday, but none cheat,
the whole class will be treated to ice cream."
Back then, who'd guess success is competition,
most work mere techno-wage-slave exploitation
at endless hours of desk-bound inanition -
and all gifts fare for greed's mere despoliation?
Poetry3 years agoCould somebody please critique this poem?
“Heart Glue: A Line”
I could inquire whether, if I asked you out -
A movie, say – you would tell me, “No.” Then, if
You didn't want to go, you'd say “Yes,” that's what
You'd answer if I asked you out – which I
Would then be certain not to do. This way
You would avoid the guilt of snubbing such
A sterling blackguard as myself and I
Escape despair of one rejected by
So hot a little honey as you are.
No-risk seduction courts with lines like these.
But should you answer, No, you'd not deny me,
I'd have to wonder what I might do then.
I might complain you too familiar are.
Your acquiescence fast made me your friend
And as such I'd have to warn you against
Galoots like me who aren't always brave,
Indomitably strong, infallibly
Sagacious, as one worthy of your charms
Would have to be – although those same allures
Perforce reduce ev'ry mere man to lust
And horny hankering. But since
Despair and guilt are dead, heartbreak won't
Stand a chance – I'd go ahead and ask you out.
5 AnswersPoetry3 years agoCould someone please critique this poem?
“On a Card for a Double Nuptuals”
Pariahs and Ishmaels arise,
Let's wipe the blindness from our eyes.
Love's a chance, but time's a felon -
Put ice cream on that watermelon!
Find, and live together one
To savor with the joys of fun -
To relish, even, perhaps more -
'til one who're two are three – no, four!
Delighting in variety
Delight must veil in secrecy,
Let secret door's forfould menage -
Two couples' duplex – seem mirage.
For jealousy's there dead
As feeds within his head
An earwig of illicit lusting -
Desire has grown friendship-trusting.
Wives, their husbands, who so bop
As dance this four-way spousal swap,
Take, wedded to a higher power,
Pariahs, Ishmaels, your hour.
2 AnswersPoetry3 years agoCould somebody critique this poem?
Between the cloudland After-death
Where archetypes choke the fancy's breath -
And Underneath, the slave-world's girth
Where confrontation binds men's mirth -
Between, recline the downs Compose
Where thrives imagination's nose.
Above, sky's science-loving sea
Where freezes fabulosity;
Below is Vision's workhouse grim
Where businessmen indenture him!
Amidmost, groves of Artistry
Where feeling throbs, alive and free.
Reluctance here's beset with lots
Of gentle heart-seducing plots,
And here in children's sun of Morn
Congeal the gifts wherewith they're born;
From this alone of worlds that are
May poets hope to reach some star.
10 AnswersPoetry3 years agoCould somebody please critique this poem?
In Space
They call it "O," the point they make,
extending thence six segments straight
of which three plus directions take
called forward, right or up; create
their opposites - back, left or down -
which they are styling "negative,"
then stretch the ends past edge of town -
each duple axis, positive
and minus, perpendicular
to plane where other two may live.
These map-makers then go too far,
three signed coordinates t'assign,
three distances from ev'ry point
to get to any axis line.
What omnipresent powers annoint
these heads that feign to compass all
of space? They fear no vanity
nor reckon hearts of poetry
can sing their own geometry
where most ingenious pride must fall,
can rhyme how technocratic men
colleague in Mother Earth's disgrace.
Let reason's evil graphing then
in its cartesian plane or space
be closed in mirror pentagons
or by dodecahedrons bound
that center on the origins
of weapons formuls we've found,
derived by fiends who view 'til late
their cursed, fallen, broken state -
contracting them nigh unto death.
The rest of space can take a breath,
its denisens no more play rubes
all sliced and diced in squares and cubes.
Despite each migit-devil's jibe,
a huge icosohedral room
then let some poets circumscribe
about each moaning jail-tomb
so now imps view, at their release,
on each triangular bulkhead
old bards portrayed who've found surcease
from diabolic plottings dread,
or angels framed in trinities
who do with hellions what they please.
14 AnswersPoetry3 years agoCould someone please critique this poem?
“Heart”
Small high-school boy who's come to grief
from football bully, lunch-bread thief,
take heart – in science class you'll shine,
earn scholarships too, down the line;
and his ascendancy won't last:
you're bound for college, he the street;
from tougher thugs he can't run past
he'll there his due comeuppance meet.
As you win wealth with your degree
he'll toil as your Security
while they, your cops, herd dumb wage-slaves
for you until they reach their graves.
But there are some who cages can't
dissuade from dreams, ideals or art -
who, decoyed by recruiters' rant
through chaos, war – will yet keep heart!
1 AnswerPoetry3 years agoCould somebody please critique this poem?
"On a Christmas Card"
On X-mas day we celebrate
that sweet nativity of X''s,
whom jealousy's god's son we rate,
knew neither girl gods nor sex's.
For merciful forgiveness, though,
compassionating empathy,
he was no slouch - and so
in all our pantheons he'll be
with those love-gods we venerate
with maybe readier devotion -
mad votaries DO take the notion.
3 AnswersPoetry3 years agoCould somebody please critique this poem?
“Reflection”
Does he who dwells behind
the glass wherein I look
suspect what he will find
if he should wink? The kook
he sees must right then wink -
my other eye. Who'd think?
Supposing I then trace
with my right index finger
clockwise loops in space -
his southpaw circles linger
with counterclockwise grace,
quite complementary
and yet contrarian,
sincerest flattery
with artful varyin'
In portrait, to my left,
hangs she, beside our mirror,
by whom my heart was reft -
since then I've been joy's fearer.
Let mirrored me glance right, he
would more than likely see
some nymph whom he rebounded to
since losing not one week to rue,
leaning langorous on his wall -
his joy, his flame or fleeting all.
6 AnswersPoetry4 years agoCould somebody please critique this poem?
"Artist"
To make imaginings real is not
so difficult - this painting that I've got
half-done grew from my first reflecting that
a meld of hilly landscapes with the flat
would change straight lines of depth that merge,
toward point of vanishing converge -
they, depth-ward into distance shrinking,
diminuating sign-waves now become
A place as uniform as plane is this,
though hilly as one upland drizzles kiss,
but morning scene, sea-surge-like suburb-scape
from eaves-height viewed through eyes tear-eddies drape.
Impose, on third-D sign-waves growing small,
elliptic ripples, major axes all
contracting, snaking down horizon rays:
The anonym is blue some summer days.
Perhaps that background city's made him sad,
a tedium he grows less and less glad
to go to weekday mornings in that town,
some parabolic tower's looming frown.
Jack Mellender
3 AnswersPoetry4 years ago