Could somebody please critique this poem?

You set up the premise of your poem nicely, but

when I hit the shorter middle stanza, my fears were

made true.

Very good work, I enjoyed. This was mostly iambic

trimester, not an easy task, at least for me, as it's a

'tweener' - not too short, not too long, but your cadence

moved with a good beat. If you were shooting for all

in sync, there are a few that were 8 syllable but no one

said it had to be perfect, in fact, I think interspersing some

mixed meter to convey what's in your heart is the sign of

a good poet, and you filled the bill. Congrats. Thomas

Its overbearing and makes little sense.

Some lines try being fancy but fail.

Here's one of a few .

he sees must right then wink

The narrator`s inner reflections are made inseparable from the mirror`s tracings of them

according to his moving before, and within it.From love to fleeting pleasure, then..Reflection. I find the twists and turnings conveyed to be reminiscent of all who...question, unceasingly, and this to be a fine fine poem.

I really like it! Editing with more punctuation will make it flow better!

Can she lean, "against" the wall, instead of, "on the wall", in the second last line?

And I like an exclamation mark at the end of, "his fleeting all!" ...?

Does he who dwells behind,

the glass, wherein, I look,

suspect what he will find,

if he should happen to wink?

The "Kook!", he sees,

must by rights ...

"Then wink my other eye!",

Who'd think? ...

Supposing .....

(Paragraph makes it easy on the readers eyes)( Nice to see you, Tommy!)xxx

No one criticizes this

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