(war poetry) Is this any good?
I'm writing random war poetry.. ( this one is about Omaha beach)
I just feel like doing it , i don't know why.
Can you give your honest opinion please?
Its just the start and i often scrap a few poems before i come up with the finished thing. Also , i know i need to work on punctuation
thanks :)
we hit the beach
we fall like flies
can't stop to think
or hear their cries
shell fire shakes our souls
i sink to the sand
i stain it red
soon i am silenced
my life i have shed
in a flash all is black and my sences abandon me
i abandon myself.
i am gone