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In a land afar he holds it down

in muck so fair on earth so seedy

it writhes in pleasure in fear in hatred

in hands unsanded breathing air unfiltered

untampered by oxygen or greed or years,

vocabulary or innocence.

he hangs it up on jutting stone

he hangs it up on electric anger

buzzing white and black

tearing up and down the lanes told by change

and promise

he holds it tight against his chest

it comes to life against his will.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    I firmly recommend a title that gives the reader an idea of the subject matter. The poem is filling in the picture, but I don't know what the subject of the picture is. If you start with the noun/idea that the poem is about - then the rest of it will make more sense and fit.

  • 1 decade ago

    No title, unless the title comes from you. It's better that way. :D

  • 1 decade ago

    what's the question exactly?

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