What's your opinion about this poem of mine ?

IMHO (I am not a poet nor a professional in the field) - I think this poem could be great if you work on it some more.

The first three lines really grabbed my attention, but then I was distracted by a change in rhythm, and some spelling (Quite or Quiet?) and typos ('mydelf', 'silhoute').

I just didn't want those distractions because I once lived in Melbourne and I wanted to feel what you were feeling.

I love the way you play with the words to make the experience feel real.

Thank you for the memory, and good luck.

I have never given a complement on an Answer poem, but you do show potential. Someone already caught the quite-quiet problem, and it looks like you threw limo in as not to use "car" again. If it is a limo (in the lexicon of everyday speak), I guess you could be carrying the silhouette of nothingness you seem to hint at.

Keep it up.

that would to me they'd teach. with regret I started home- with my eager upturned face. Just one more leaf, childlike I thought I LOVE your poem, I just like the changes above, sorry, its just personal on my part, nothing more. GREAT JOB, its beautiful! I got totally lost in it which is rare for a poem. Also, the rhythm reminds me of the Walrus and the Carpenter which I also like although its not "pretty" lol However the last four lines lost me. For one thing everything you describe about the leaves, the lake, its all so beautiful and enrapturing, yet you want your life to someday be beautiful. It already is . . .

I think you have potential, this won't of course be your magnum opus, the one you'll be remembered for or anything, but it's shows great potential.

Yes, I have a degree in literature.

good poem, the end

should be more persist.

when i and the beauties of mist had met!!

i felt the beat of my heart,

submit.

It's okay