What do you think of my poem which deals with the Holocaust and my dark side?

Disturbing but well written. This shows you are brave and face problems head on, as can be seen by your scathing poem on a dark section of history. This also shows how you, a Jew, see things the way it is and not hide everything under the carpet. The world needs people like you.

It concerns a non secular and actual haunting. Xenogeny: Giving beginning to some thing unusual, a distant places (extraterrestrial or from yet another measurement) existence. it would additionally be our hidden fears, oppressions that are accumulated and directed in direction of some thing threatening and unsightly. Boat, hollow decrease on throat. Slaughtered? Or drowned to death? Rusty disposes in direction of some thing steel and previous. In a wild attempt of guessing, this good be Ares, the pink planet, packed with iron corrosion, rust yet with out environment. nevertheless to have rust, pink, potential there develop into Oxygen returned then, returned then it develop into, a memory of Ares, ineffective now, inhabitants choked to death without a appropriate environment to breath from. i'd desire to be a techniques out out of your suggestion, yet as consistently, I offered a logical clarification. you're a charismatic author, a chum and a brother.

An interesting read, but I don't pretend to know the horrors of the holocaust, nor do I believe the writer could possibly grasp the depth of its inhumanity.

"Get someone well knowledge to tell you" MEANS he doesn't know what he's talking about. And of course he says that after he critiques something he knows nothing about, LOL!

All you need is more experience, keep working hard at it and you will do fine!

Wrong category. Put it under Poetry. But to answer your question about the poem, I think using the work "luck," or "lucky" insults all those who suffered and died in the holocaust.

Not well written. You could never make any money writing poems. There are many problems with it. Perhaps you could get someone well knowledge to tell you. The subject matter has lost its appeal. Most people know what happened and are pretty much tired of being reminded.

Not to mention it is in the wrong category.

Very well written. Perhaps a bit dark on some levels.

Very expressive. I did enjoy reading it.

I am certain that in some form it was therapeutic emotionally.

Heartfelt and well written. I don't think it's an insult to use "luck" and "lucky". It explains why some survived when others didn't. My relatives were among the "unlucky".

senior goth or emo???????? kewl ! ps-the guy above me is a creep! he has no empathy,ignore him.im sorry ur family went thru that.

I appreciate it. I met my friend's mother who told me how she was in a camp with her sister. Her sister got sick, and they took her away. She thought they would take her to a doctor, but they took her to the gas chamber.