would you care to comment on this poem?

If you dragged it out it a bit it wouldn't be as silly,

this seeming cosmic accident of having let our Willy

He'd have to walk a steady beat to catch you in his web

You'd only be iambic-al-ly boring for a step.

You'd only be for one more step iambic boring.

and then you'd pad a line and finally hear yourself a-snoring

and quickly oh so quickly you'd find that's where you'd be

Iambically snoring, nearly dying from ennui

Dread thought itch, I get!

Gnats biting, not nuts yet!

I liked yours I was just being silly/iambically boring. What a great word.

You are a wonderful imitator of Willy S. However, I am happy to see you branching out into other poetic forms. You always have something important to say in your poems, no matter which format you choose. And you never (well, hardly ever) waste a word. Your poetry flows and you have learned about the power of words and you employ that power to your poetry's greatest advantage.

Gives me the

Tim Burton eewee geeweez

I'm not too much of a fan of the poem. I find it odd and it doesn't make too much sense.

I have started rushing to see what you have posted when I see your avatar! So, I'm a fan.

the metaphor here is delicious. And of course, the "form" underlines the irony

great,i understand it.this is the type i like simple and funny.i actually chuckled.

it has no form.no flow .no nothing yet it is good.

The only thing is ..too short

There's and eerie feeling coming with it...It's Original and clever, I really like it!

bloody awful

Wow. This is really good :)