would you care to comment on this poem?

I think it's an onion, with no layers.

This onion doesn't need layers.

It's very good.

For me this has as many layers as an onion. It could be a description of a tempestuous love affair, but I see it as a description of the trauma you have lived through over the last year.

The thing I love about this poem is how you use words and phrases in a totally unique way -

eg fickle winds, cycloned fears, cumulus emotions and cracked hail and how you sustain the metaphor throughout.

I don't understand "cumulus motions", clouds? But that may just be a product of me not understanding much, i'll most likely wake up in a few months and get what it actually meant.

This is great and I especially love the line "heart debris".

numbing shock

clearing all this

heart debris,

walking in the dark.

hmmm seems there's more than eye can see the real meaning can be a bit complicated to understand

Very nice combination of images and emotions. Good techniques with using the weather. You show some promise; keep it up

I like the verbal fireworks but then I got lost in the after-smoke.

..hearts debris,

walking in the dark

That's an odd line..

Take care,Gary..

The eye of the storm can be deceiving. nice pen

In depth, I like the metaphors, good pen.

Hello,

Where have you been!

i like it :) the most important thing is if u like it.