What is your opinion of this poem?

Hi, Cynth (Each of your previous postings had been deleted by the time I got to them. Why?)

The poem is excellent, save for one thing....which is that, we, ignoramuses don't know that Hope came last from Pandora's Box...so when you say Internet matchmakers are like PD/save for one small matter.....it confuses us! (well, it did me anyway)

One other small blip - the word 'before'............you are using it in the sense of something being put in front of some-one, I read it like 'before they went to breakfast' - if you see what I mean, then the sentence didn't end right......so, I trawled back to see where I'd gone wrong...and figured out my mistake.....any chance of a slight tweak there? (I know glory/before are slant rhymed...but maybe a little sacrifice of the rhyming to aid sense would be a good idea?)

This new you? I like it. The echoing rhyming is sweet to my ears, the line breaks work exactly as they should and the whole thing is a treat.

certainly coming from a professional poet, it sounds somewhat compelled. Do you think of this is compelled? certainly this is an tremendously stable first attempt. you have the capacity to place your emotions obtainable. yet is does have stretched throughout it. you purely would desire to enable the words bypass. do no longer make something pop out. in case you do it is going to look like a pen exploded throughout your website. and ... EDIT EDIT EDIT my costly. the foremost to a stable poem is distinctive copies.

Nice write C.

Sometimes I think Hope is what's left, and that I may die hopeful.

Hope is the engine that rolls the tape of one's life. Hope to find love, to marry, to have a kid, to see him/her graduate, to see and hold their kids, and so on and so forth. And that's only one side to hope.

The Internet is another story about which your poem says a lot.

This is quite... unique. I enjoyed it. Particularly the human deli. Oh Oh Oh - Can I be the Ham???

What? You don't have 9 thumbs?

You are really close to greatness here...and...Pandora's box is a perfect Internet simile.

IMNSHO

RB

Oh the many cartoon images this recalls! LOL And Brad Paisley's fairly recent "Online"!

Great stuff!

... I don't get it O__O... what does pandora have to do with the internet xD?

Wow.. Your a bit amazing aren't you!

I'm glad you're moving away from the Sonnet and into free verse. This is a stellar representation of the dangers of the Internet. Yes, "sometimes, it works," but most of the time it does not.Your poem is ironic, expressive and true, all at the same time.