Will you share your C/C on this poem?

I am new here. There are some who can actually write. I'll add you to the list.

It's a nice tight piece of writing.

The opening two lines set up the conceit nicely.

L3-4 are the most descriptive. I very much like the use of embroidered and French-knotted stars.

The last two lines also work well.

If I were to critique any of it it would be L5.

This is of course just my opinion: Warm and Safe to me don't add a lot. Certainly under a comforter you may feel warm and safe but when you contrast the idea with L6 no brash Sun can burn my face the night is by contrast put forth as cool. Even if we didn't have the contrast that line steps away from imagery and descriptive language and settles for labeling words that tell us something. I think your poem could exist without the line or the concepts could be reworked into the other lines.

Overall though it is good work.

Best,

Todd

Was very small, and very simple, and very lovely in that!

Sounds like a delightfully poetic surrender to your Circadian Rhythm! And your metaphors make it all seem t'make sense! Very LARGE kudos!

Write on...

Hey; I like this. Can I ask what you refer to by "twinkling"??

An enjoyable read, C.

This is stellar, no pun intended. You have mastered the metaphor. When I read this poem, I actually had a physical reaction. This is what true poetry does to its readers.

Addition: I believe the poet is referring to the lights behind your eyelids when you close your eyes.