Dating With Extreme Prejudice - Critique Please?

~Dating With Extreme Prejudice~

Diligence dallies,

drawn between soft-shoe shuffle

of whispering corners,

where finger walking negates talking

‘cos tongues are knotted in spittoon embrace,

and voyeuristic carnage vomiting

from polished pine floor,

where stiff ***** bob to a racing heart

and booty is shaken not stirred.

Ice cube charms melting

under heated collars swerving to avoid

dangerous curves with no safety net

to cushion their fall,

and is it the last dance

when weaving a straight line

with digits as wet as the gusset

they dethroned,

or self relief merely misaimed.