Will you C & C SHE a new first draft poem for me?

This is a truly wonderful poem came strait from your heart and that's what matters.

the language of poetry the ability to formulate our thoughts , disability is a gift sometimes, if it happens by injury it's the way god wants it, he helps us to find support and serch for treatmen

Listening to the melody of the night

sensations stir and she writes

of the beauty that is hidden

to Earth's wretched minions.

Thank you :)

I presume you are describing someone who chooses to see the best in others and ignores the baser parts of the human existence. If so, you did well. The thought also occurred that you might be describing a female Deity such as Oprah often says she believes in, but I seriously doubt that to be the case. If I am wrong, then the descriptions in the poem are understated for an omniscient being.

I do think you need a title longer than one word. SHE conjures up the idea of the female tyrant in the many movies of the same name (the last one I saw many years ago starred Ursula Andress-I think).

Over all I think it is very good.

She is a special person, that is for sure.

Your poem is well written with superb imagery. I can see the sunset with the crescent moon showing. I love the expression color coded leaves which speak volumes about fall.

I hope this is what she sees in her world. I'd like it to be mine as well.

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She is nature's child

But more like a sister

A kindred soul is she

Unafraid as she stands

Alone? Nay, never alone

Creatures abound around her

Even the bugs are friends

A world alive with her

He dares not intrude

But silently watches her

In her silent yet eloquent

Dialogue with the earth

(I couldn't help but offer a few verses of my own. This is beautiful, and so near to my heart.)

A beautiful response to the question asked. I did need to read the question to better understand the poem, but once in that space I was transfixed by the way this poem responds to it.

Thank you.

Hi Tori! Its a blessing your well and I knew you would be back with your brilliant writing. Thank you for including me in to read because your writing is awesome and I'm your fan. I don't feel a critic on that writing tonight. Its beautiful!

The story of her life

Beautiful

This is great.You can make the sun shine even when it's raining.

I am actually amazed,this is beautiful. a 9 1/2.

God's wonder shows in this and in you.

byeeexxx

If that is a first draft then I can't wait to see the finished poem. That was awesome.

Your vision is amazing. This shows why you called yourself a Betazoid when Star Trek NG was on. It's really beautiful. I'm sure the woman appreciated your gift. I know I do.

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